Here is a little glimpse of my opening scene. Please provide me with some feedback so I can improve.
I can hear his teeth grinding as the handcuffs smashed onto his all ready bruised up wrists. “I’m so sorry, I’ll be back, I promise.” His voice echoed throughout the entire building as they pulled him down the stairs. Silent tears are already rolling down my pale cheeks. The poor little boy just clinged to my right leg as I tried to shove him back into the silent room. Without a word in my mouth, I closed the door once again. No need for words because this was already the fifth time this year. A boy without his dad. Nothing was changing, the same silence as it always has been. The little boy was now five years old. Five years of his short life that was without “him.” Each time just a little bit longer. Each time was a different excuse, another apology. But these doors were staying closed.
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In this blog post, I am explaining my processes and reflections on writing my first draft to my Life-Choice Memoir. I explain some challenges and some ways I believe I can better my drafts. I also included the link to a Reflective Writing video that gives an amazing explanation of reflection.
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